No summer lies

May 17, 2011

I think of your hair
fluttering in the breeze,
and of your hands when you
sat next to me on the warm mountain,
hands clutching pencil
as if it was the last spear on earth,
your yellow pad a shield, but flimsy;
Words, ripe and harsh,
were falling from your tongue

I wanted
to preserve their taste
for desert days;
but you just smiled and said –
forget it, close your eyes,
keep drinking deep
from this brief summer,
While I keep scratching
words into the paper

Your anger melted
when the graphite of your pencil
wore down to the stump;
But it was late, too late and you were
cracked already,
already open and unsure if you
should swim or drown in memories,
spilling your talent like your life blood
across the barriers we had built

This is a heavy re-work of a poem written by Claudia Schoenfeld, and the original can be found here.

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9 Responses to “No summer lies”

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  2. claudia said

    i just LOVE it Anton!!

  3. Leslie said

    fascinating to read the two poems one after the other… i love this line:

    “hands clutching pencil
    as if it was the last spear on earth,
    your yellow pad a shield, but flimsy;”

    lovely collaboration.

  4. Its simply beautiful. So much raw emotion and expressed with such eloquence

  5. very well done…i read this and loved it..was captivated before i read it was a rework..cheers pete

  6. I really love this poem on so many levels. It fills me with poignant thoughts.

  7. C Rose said

    I just read Claudia’s and so coming to this was quite the treat. I enjoyed the perspective changes.

    “I wanted
    to preserve their taste
    for desert days;”

    Loved this sequence ~ Rose

  8. Truly eloquent, well done.

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