Temporary salvation

November 2, 2010

Sabina dances
like there’s no
today
Sequins swirl in my living room
and the lady
below us
hears
her bare feet

She doesn’t care
about the Tories or the oil price;
she dances for dancing, and
for the hours
you spend
criticizing the world order
Only to toil some more

‘You are children who
became slaves for profit’
she chants,
‘You have no foes and listen
Only to the wisdom of ants’

Sabina doesn’t care
about oaths, or the compacts
we signed
She dances for our salvation
And her freckled skin
and her breasts
make us remember
how much we have lost

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19 Responses to “Temporary salvation”

  1. Wonderful in it’s darkish burlesque lament.

  2. Claudia said

    this is what it paints before my eyes…men in business suits – managers – juggling responsibilities – sitting in a bar – watching this girl dance – and forget the pressure for a moment – and realize for an hour on what they miss out – before they go back to their desks…very well written anton!

  3. brian said

    yeah i get the temporary pleasures feel to this as well…and i wonder if they dont look at teh freedom she has to dance while they are weighted to their desks…

  4. poemblaze said

    Such a joyful motion with dark borders surrounding it. A poem to ponder.

  5. Rene Foran said

    whatever you do, Sabrina, don’t stop the dance

  6. dustus said

    Many individual lines in this poem stand boldly taken out of context. Lost me a little at the shift to the lady down stairs, yet the line “criticizing the world order Only to toil some more” speaks volumes.

  7. Glynn said

    I’ve read it three times, and each time something new appeared — likely from the sequins reflecting different lights. She dances for the point of dancing. must like the poet writes for the point of writing. Good one.

  8. Shashi said

    I liked the dance… Its so beautiful… Without any care, only for the love of the dance…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
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  9. forpuck said

    Thanks everyone for your kind words.

    @dustus – thanks for the comment. I’ve cleaned up the first stanza which should make it much clearer and in fact what I was aiming for when I wrote this.

  10. shanellis said

    In those moments of freedom, who cares about the politics of the UK. Dance in your bare feet and forget about beuracracy and suits and recessions. Would like to do it more often! Gorgeous write

  11. wkkortas said

    As Tom Robbins wrote in Even Cowgirls Get The Blues, “The international situation was desperate, as usual.” Wonderful juxtaposition of the uncomplicated, unfettered joy of dancing and the constantly fretful world of politics and policies. Clean, visual, well-built writing.

  12. Dick said

    As others have noted, a great synthesis of the dead hand of the intrusive external world and the triumphant vitality of the individual. Loved it.

  13. Eric said

    Well, ants are pretty well-known for their wisdom… just as the grasshopper. (LOL!)

    Nice One Shot, Anton!

  14. really enjoyed this..maybe from my own personal experiences….thanks for the share…pete

  15. PattiKen said

    I read this as an ode to the days before our priorities got distorted by things that are maybe not as important as we have come to believe. Maybe it’s time to stop and enjoy a dance or two.

  16. forpuck said

    Once again, thanks for the comments everyone. It matters a lot that people read.

  17. Urban, political, sharp.

  18. The momentary breaks of the everyday world wizzing by, still for a minute or two to watch art at its best.

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